(c) Searching For Blue [M]

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(c) Searching For Blue [M]

Post by gloria- on Sat 13 Sep 2008, 11:31 am

Title: Searching For Blue
Rating: M for implied violence, but really however your mind sees it.
Author: princess obv.
Status: oneshot; complete.
Summary: Something of a disturbed oneshot. You may make of it what you will.
Warning: Implied violence.

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I cried until I couldn’t breathe for the sobs. I cried until I couldn’t move for the shakes. I cried, and I cried, and I cried. I cried until I couldn’t see for the tears. I cried until I couldn’t feel for the pain.

I cried.

I cried and cried and cried and nothing came of it. No one came for me. Nobody saw me. Nothing was there.

Just me. Me. Just me.

You? No me. Just me. Always just me. Me and tears.

Tears. Rips. Shreds. My heart to shreds. Nothing ever hurt this bad. Just pain. Just pain. Just me. Just tears.

No one came. No one was there. Nothing. Just me. White room. Tubes. Needles. White. Always white.

Just white and nothing else. No me. Tears. White me tears. Tears me white. Me white tears. Me tears white?

White tears me. No white. No more white. Blue. Blue calm. Blue you. Blue us. Just blue. You blue.

Blue. Your colour. Colour you. Blue for me. Blue for you. You for blue. Blue eyes. Eyes blue. You eyes blue. You blue eyes? Blue you eyes. Blue.

Blue. Green? No blue. Blue us. Blue me you.

White no. No white. White room. White room. Sleep please. Please sleep. Dark sleep. Sleep dark. Dark.

Blue. Dark blue. Blue dark. Blue you. You blue. You MY blue. My you. Miss you. You miss? Miss me. Me miss. Me miss you. You miss me? Miss me. Miss you.

You blue. Blue for you. Blue for me. Blue for us. Us for blue. Blue. Blue. Please blue. No white. Blue. Blue need blue. More blue. Blue for blue. Blue for you. You for blue. Trade blue for you. Want you. Blue eyes. Blue. You blue. You. You.

Us. You me us you. Us you. Us you blue. Blue me. Blue you. You eyes. You blue eyes. Blue eyes. Eyes blue. Blue blue. Blue you. Blue.

Red. No blue. Red. Red everywhere. No red. Yes red. Red more red. Red for me. Blue for you. Red. Red skin. Red wet. Red. Red me.

Me red. Red no blue. No more blue. Just red. Red me. You blue. Blue eyes. Red wet. Red wet.

Blue. Red. Red blue. Me red. Red.

No more. Red gone. Blue gone. White gone. All gone. Gone gone all gone.

Fin.

checked. chester.

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Re: (c) Searching For Blue [M]

Post by faultlines on Sat 13 Sep 2008, 11:52 am

I love this. I really, really do.
It broke my heart.

It's beautiful. I love the wordplay here. nawwww

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Re: (c) Searching For Blue [M]

Post by gloria- on Sat 13 Sep 2008, 10:44 pm

Thank you. (:

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Re: (c) Searching For Blue [M]

Post by sullen riot. on Mon 22 Sep 2008, 10:27 pm

I read this a long long time ago, and it was such a shock. A good one.
It's surprising how much of an impact a few words can make. You don't need any fancy vocabulary, you don't need imagery or any of that. You used the vocabulary of like, a 6 year old, and wrote something absolutely wonderful.

I love it. One of my favorite works ever. nawwww

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